I suggested she consider looking at the structures of other stories, including Pulp Fiction, The Usual Suspects and The Sixth Sense to see if maybe part (or all) of her story needed to be moved.
As an exercise, watch a movie that’s structured the same way as your own script and then watch a movie that’s structured differently. You might be surprised to see that if you just move one sequence (or even one scene), you can find the dramatic intensity your story was lacking.
Various structures to consider:
The Straight Story
The Sixth Sense
Fried Green Tomatoes
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